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Post by Komrade Kharloth on Thu May 19, 2011 11:52 pm

Holy Hell, Stalin was one suave looking motherfucker

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Post by Dead Herald on Fri May 20, 2011 1:18 am

Young Putin was kind of cute.

Still a commie prick though.

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Post by MilkyFresh on Sun May 29, 2011 9:51 am

Oh, it's THIS discussion again

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Post by Furburt on Sun May 29, 2011 11:42 pm

We're on repeat.

Turians.

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Post by MilkyFresh on Mon May 30, 2011 9:49 am

Hahahahahahahahahahaah

oh my

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Post by PayJ on Mon May 30, 2011 9:51 am

I must of missed something cause I was never involved in all that Turian stuff.

On a related note I don't know what's happening with these songs. Put it down to a crazy whim I had sober at 3am. Similar to my harmonica and what not.

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Post by Komrade Kharloth on Mon May 30, 2011 3:03 pm

PayJ567 wrote:I must of missed something cause I was never involved in all that Turian stuff.

Long story short, tellmeimaninja kept mentioning turians in pretty much every single post, so hub started trolling him, ninja threw a shitfit and deleted his profile.

It was funny as all fuck.

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Post by Dead Herald on Mon May 30, 2011 3:29 pm

Ah, memories...

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Re: Ok, could I get some honest Opinions?

Post by PayJ on Mon May 30, 2011 5:17 pm

Haha, shit I've missed somehow while I'm on the site loads.

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Re: Ok, could I get some honest Opinions?

Post by Sik on Tue Jun 14, 2011 9:38 pm

PayJ, you asked for honest opinions right? Which is basically the same as constructive criticism, right?

I think that your subject matter is good, and I like a lot of what you're saying, but you're not really writing on more than one level. It's very obvious, and I don't feel like you've said as much as you could say in that many lines. It's clearly a matter of taste, but what I'd hope to see is more ideas crammed together, leave a little more to be interpreted, more metaphor and, well, a little more violence! Poetry (lyrics are poetry) doesn't need to conform quite so much to sentence structures, so I'd suggest being more playful and not worrying too much if people get it. When you show them to us, if we don't get it, you can always say what you were going for!

Just my two cents, and I think you've got some cojones for putting this stuff out there.

Also, just because I criticise doesn't mean I think it's bad. I enjoyed reading them, and I liked their messages, I just think you can make the points you're making more powerful. Keep posting, I'm told that song writing, like everything, is an entirely iterative process.

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Post by PayJ on Tue Jun 14, 2011 9:45 pm

Dude you don't have to be so polite with me. I don't get offended.

Thanks for the criticisms. I said I would go away and work on the songs and never did. I'm waiting on my mate to produce some rifts for them but that'll never happen. I think like everything else I try this has died an early death.

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Post by Sik on Tue Jun 14, 2011 11:04 pm

PayJ567 wrote:Dude you don't have to be so polite with me. I don't get offended.

Thanks for the criticisms. I said I would go away and work on the songs and never did. I'm waiting on my mate to produce some rifts for them but that'll never happen. I think like everything else I try this has died an early death.

Yeah I'm getting that impression, but I wrote some songs back in the day (before following the exact same path of 'ahhhh fuck it') so I know what it's like to put that shit in front of people. Even if you don't give a fuck, you still kind of give a fuck a little. I don't want to put you off with my criticism, so it's one of the few situations I'll go out of my way to state the positives as well. If there were no positives, I'd have told you not to try to write songs, but good effort for trying.

As for developing this stuff, I had an English teacher with whom I was pretty good friends who wrote poems and she told me she wrote thousands of them that she never showed anyone and didn't even keep, just as a way of developing a voice and an evolution. I only read a few of her poems (we weren't lovers, so fucked if I'm reading her fucking poetry) and they were okay I guess, but she absolutely loved writing them. My point here is if you like writing this stuff enough, just do it for yourself. If you happen to find someone to set something you really like to music later, then great, and if not, who cares? You like writing. I did not particularly like creative writing though so I didn't keep doing it. Sounds like you're more in my mold than hers.
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Post by PayJ on Tue Jun 14, 2011 11:10 pm

Ah this was all written when I came off weed when I went up college for a bit.

It's all out of date for the speed of which my mind works at.

And nawh I wouldn't let what anyone else thinks get to me at all. Ain't my style. Had enough of being like that in school.

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Post by MilkyFresh on Wed Jun 15, 2011 4:14 am

PayJ567 wrote:Dude you don't have to be so polite with me. I don't get offended.
You're a faggot.

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Post by Dead Herald on Wed Jun 15, 2011 4:31 am

MilkyFresh wrote:
PayJ567 wrote:Dude you don't have to be so polite with me. I don't get offended.
You're a faggot.

Well, you're the expert.

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Re: Ok, could I get some honest Opinions?

Post by PayJ on Wed Jun 15, 2011 7:09 am

MilkyFresh wrote:
PayJ567 wrote:Dude you don't have to be so polite with me. I don't get offended.
You're a faggot.
... Milky I don't think we can be friends anymore. You took it too far.

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