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Post by GrinningManiac on Tue May 10, 2011 4:30 pm

Here's a rough idea for a story I've written concerning the idea that the universe is actually folded up on itself and in it exists many spatial dimensions who live side by side without realising. A man from our world is dragged into the insane world of a mad professor who studies the various dimensions and the links, bridges and rifts between them. He's dragged into a revolution against an oppressive military junta, the whirlwind of insane technology, strange cultures and bizarre people threatens to engulf him and all he wants to do is get back home safely. Just to make sense of it - our dimension is the 1st dimension (not canonically, but for simplicity's sake), also called "our dimension" or "our world" whereas theirs is the 2nd Dimension.

The notes were written as a mental map for me, so they might not make sense. Criticise or question anything and help me make the story airtight. Thanks

Spoiler:

Professor Rasul "Peabody" de Taxila is an odditologist - a scientist of the study of dimensions and interdimensional observation. He is a member of the Society of Odditology in the city of Johnson - the capital of the Accumulative Republic - an oppressive, conservative military junta that took the land by force years ago. The Accumulative Republic despise the study of odditology and are making moves to remove it. The society is underground as of this period. Peabody has been captured and taken prisoner and his mind is messed with - his brain scrambled. He escapes and flees across the dimensions to our world.

There he meets Harold, a bored, depressed ex-serviceman who lives alone. Harold takes Peabody in, beleiving him to be mentally unbalanced (Peabody is completely mentally scrambled, rememeber) and calls the police (or whatever service you'd call under these situations) to pick him up. Peabody is still scatterbrained but recovers and Harold finds him cooking Beef Stroganov in the kitchen. When the authorities arrive Peabody calmly assures them of his sanity, speaks at length and eloquently...and then knocks them out with the pot he was cooking with. He runs for it and Harold gives chase. They are soon lost and Harold catches up with the (suprisingly sprightly) old man. Peabody explains his situation and when Harold disbeleives him Peabody points out how they're completley lost in unfamiliar setting. Harold is worried that he is lost and is initially annoyed at Peabody for getting him lost but is forced to accept the old man's hospitality at the fire he set up. There, Peabody explains the entire situation and how he's likely to be picked up. Harold dosen't beleive him but goes along with the discussion.

Out of nowhere, a huge Flying Fortress (belonging to Peabody though piloted by Tullouise) comes to pick them up. There they meet Tulliouse, a friendly fellow odditologist who is condenscending about our dimension's scientific capablitly and overall competence as a civilisation. He is nice to Harold, if patronising. They travel to the Society aboard the (need name). (The society members travel aboard craft like Peabody's between dimensions to evade pursuers. They are meeting at a secret locale. Peabody's crew are the loyal refugees of his family's former principality - Taxilia (dimensionally related to our Taxila area. Peabody and his people had fought the Republic's accumulation of them). There, Peabody delivers an impassioned speech about how Harold's dimension overthrew a cancerous evil like that of the Republic (read - Nazism and Stalinism etc). The response is positive, if not enthusiatic. Tullouise sadly admits that the fight went out of a lot of them a long time ago. Peabody explains to Harold that the Republic's regieme relies on inactivity and complacancy rather than an iron grip - they have instilled a sense of inevitibiltiy and "c'est la vie" in the people - who are unwilling to change anything out of apathy and inactivity. (Huxley? What was his name - dude that said opposite of Orwell). The grip is, therefore, easily shaken loose with an uprising. Harold, btw, is keen to leave. Peabody, cannot, however, immediately take him home due to this whole revolutionary thing going on. (Harold's crisis of conscience will be later due to that Peabody, wishing to keep Harold's help, has been engineering the situation slightly to avoid sending Harold home before Peabody's ready to lose his help.) Peabody decides to take his ship to the neighbouring land of Almein to recruit help from the Shah.

The Shah agrees to help, his own country on the brink of being invaded and accumulated by the Republic. However, the Republic invades early as they spotted Peabody's ship. They send a huge invasion fleet to the city and begin attacking, The Shah opts to stay and fight rather than fleeing with Peabody's ship. On the way back to the ship, the city is assailed by small screens with the Govenor of the Republic speaking on them. He goads Peabody (how's the hair? (Peabody is bald at the top from an incendinary attack by the Governor himself when they fought in Taxila)) and tells Peabody he knows about Harold etc. The two of them flee aboard the _____ and back to join the others. Shaken by the torments of the Governor, Peabody confides in Harold about his past and his fears and gives Harold his sword, a Zweihander.

Now with no alternative means of attacking and no diversions or allies beyond the homeless refugees who fly with the Odditologists' fleet, the fleet is forced into a head-on attack. In the run-up to the attack, a discussion between a frantic, worried Peabody and Harold reveals that Peabody has been deliberately going about this in a way that ensures Harold stays to the end. Furious, Harold leaves the ship and watches the huge conflict from below. Harold is initially furious at Peabody but comes to reflect on the interneational significance and strain upon the professor and begins to feel bad about abandoning him. When peabody's ship is hit a shocked Harold finds himself gripping his sword. Resolute, he flies back up and helps fend off the boarding party on Peabody's ship. The battle takes a turn for the better and, when victory seems likely, Tullouise flies off to take the city ahead of the fleet. The Republic is beaten off and retreats. The fleet flies to the city of Johnathan where Harold is shocked to find the place, with its magnificent, huge buildings, practically deserted. Peabody explains on the journey through the lonely halls and rooms of the city's buildings that the place was nigh-on deserted even before the battle, as people were afraid of proximity to their cruel masters.


Tullouise takes the Society back to its original headquarters - a grand building in the centre of the city. As Acting President of the society (who/where is the old one?) he becomes the de facto ruler of the country, albeit so he can pass over to a democratic or something government. However, he becomes too attached to the power he wields - being able to control and command the forces of the former Republic. When Peabody and Harold turn up he debates whether he should just rule and not bother with the democratic thing. Peabody tries to talk him out of it, irritating him. He tells Peabody to stop talking down on him and demands the respect a governor is due. An argument breaks out in the society between Peabody's supporters and Tullouise's sychophants and supporters. Someone draws a sword, Tullouise pulls a sword on Peabody and Harold attacks him. Tullouise is badly cut on the face and he angrily orders them to be shot. Peabody and Harold are at an impasse with Tullouise and his supporters - all weapons drawn etc. They're backing off, keeping their weapons pointing at Tullouise's side when Tullouise suddenly rams a button that turns on the Dimensional Wormhole Genisis Machine - the thing that can create temporary, artificial holes between dimensions. Having trapped Harold and Peabody the goons open fire, to no avail (the machine's glass casing was built to withstand whatever came through the other side, whether lava or acidic rain or a horde of angry barbarians etc, ergo bulletproof). Having trapped them in an unbreakable prison, Tullouise opts to fire them off into a random pocket dimension, hence why they end up banished rather than dead!

The End...?


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Re: Story

Post by GrinningManiac on Tue May 10, 2011 4:37 pm

Yeah, I should mention that the Dimensional Wormhole Genesis Machine is Chekov's Gun - it's one of the many amazing machines and bits of techinical know-how the odditologists left behind when they went on the run. They're a shadow of their former glory, being the academic heart of this dimension.

I should also point out that the sword and other things I seem to briefly mention will, of course, have more focus and greater significance in the actual draft. Here I'm just running a time line.

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Post by Mr. Wiggles on Thu Jun 02, 2011 4:01 pm

Sounds damn interesting I would probably read it so would others.

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